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The Demon in the Dark (eBook)
| The Demon in the Dark | |
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 The Demon in the Dark eBook Cover, written by Bo Naidal | |
| Author(s) | Bo Naidal |
| Series | Eros Demon Saga |
| Publisher | Amazon Digital Services |
| Publication date | November 12, 2017 |
| Media type | eBook |
| Length | 27 Pages |
| ASIN | B077D5NQNZ |
For other uses of the word Incubus, see Incubus (disambiguation).
The Demon in the Dark is an eBook written by Bo Naidal. It is the first work in the Eros Demon Saga series by this author. In this work one of the characters is an Incubus.
Overview
- Title: The Demon in the Dark
- Author: Bo Naidal
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 27 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B077D5NQNZ
- Publishing Date: November 12, 2017
Other Works in this Series on SuccuWiki
Plot Summary
When Lydia Sebastian uncovers ancient pornographic images, she finds her desires out of control. Desperate to satiate her uncontrollable lust, she discovers an ancient statue of a demon sex god. Will she awaken the demon in order to satisfy her needs?
Book Review
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on November 24, 2017
Lydia, never one to really care about sex, discovers a mystery which calls to her. But as the call becomes a siren song, the lusts she’s ignored finally have their moment. A choice made and passions unleash a demon into the world.
There’s not nearly enough storytelling to make this the opening to a series of books. The story rambles, there’s just enough descriptions to peak interest, but then things turn in a direction where it’s all sex and next to nothing in character development or plot. The self-pleasures that Lydia enjoys, and the hint of mind control behind them, has some decent heat at times. But even so there’s just nothing beyond Lydia’s moaning and losing of control.
That said, when she encounters the Eros Demon, who is never named as a start, again the story becomes about the sex, describing it, revelling in it. But there’s nothing told of the demon, who to me is very much an incubus. He barely speaks, has next to no personality, other than the size of his package, and overall reads very much like an afterthought to the sex that came before.
There’s a lot of lost opportunities here and this really need not have happened. Lydia could have explored the ruins more, perhaps studied the art more. Even having her go back to her camp and get on the internet to research what she found might have helped add a lot of needed plot and fleshing out of both Lydia and the demon as well.
There is heat in the story, but it just lacks focus and, at its core, there’s meaning to it, but that’s not explained at all. The same can be said about the climax of the work in that there is a climax, and there might have been some time spent on the demon telling of what he’s going to do, or what Lydia’s now connected to. There’s a bare hint of it, but it isn’t enough to really make me want to see what comes next.
The work is very short, which makes adding in the plot needed almost impossible for how much effort is put into describing Lydia pleasuring herself. Save for a few pages at the beginning, and an ending that was confused and took away all of the heat, this is a work about a woman pleasuring herself at the behest of a demon, or something else, that’s using some mind control on her. It’s a story in itself, but there’s not any focus outside of the need that can’t be sated.
The core idea seems interesting, but the sex overcomes that. There’s one or two minor spelling mistakes and the narrative needs another going over at least to bring some life to things overall. The main characters need to be fleshed out more, most certainly the demon himself for the two-dimensional creature he seems to be when the story closes.
Two and a half out of five pitchforks.
As the beginning of a series, the story needs fleshing out to balance the overwhelming sex. There’s a hint of that, a suggestion of the overall arc of the story to be, but it’s not paid off well. If the series only results in the entire planet falling into a sexual stupor, that won’t be interesting no matter how much sex there is.
It’s the battle between Lydia and the demon that hold things together and without that having something attractive in it, no matter how much heat there is… it won’t matter. I’m hoping the next work has some depth in it, that the sex is toned down to a dull roar so the characters have a chance to tell their stories.
There is a story here, hopefully it will break though.