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On the Floor With a Sapphic Succubus - Part 1 (eBook)
| On the Floor With a Sapphic Succubus - Part 1 | |
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 On the Floor With a Sapphic Succubus - Part 1 eBook Cover, written by Jacki Sensal | |
| Author(s) | Jacki Sensal |
| Series | An Erotic and Demonic Night |
| Publisher |
Amazon Digital Services Smashwords |
| Publication date | April 25, 2021 |
| Media type | eBook |
| Length | 32 Pages |
| ISBN | 9798201020156 |
| ASIN | B093HC7M9N |
For other uses of the word Succubus, see Succubus (disambiguation).
On the Floor With a Sapphic Succubus - Part 1 is an eBook written by Jacki Sensal. It is the first work in the An Erotic and Demonic Night series by this author. In this work the character Carphalea is a Succubus.
Overview
- Title: On the Floor With a Sapphic Succubus - Part 1
- Author: Jacki Sensal
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services & Smashwords
- Length: 32 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B093HC7M9N
- ISBN: 9798201020156
- Publishing Date: April 25, 2021
Other Works in this Series on SuccuWiki
Plot Summary
Your slutty best friend sucked a way into the campus’ most exclusive Halloween party- spreading open the doors to a new realm of temptations. Dressed up to undress, you find yourself winning the heated gaze of a horny girl whose lust seems out of this world. Fall beneath the sheets of the seductively secretive Lusifen family as you discover that when something feels too good to be true- perhaps it’s naughty enough to be real after all.
Book Review
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on May 11, 2021
An invitation to a Halloween party turns in unexpected directions. The worlds of mortals and demons become entangled and where that leads to leaves only questions behind.
The work is told from the first person perspective which on occasion creates some issues with the telling of the story. From time to time the main character seems to become detached from the story and doesn’t quite find their way back into things. It’s not a constant issue, but at points there are interruptions in the telling of the story that bothered me.
Much of the story is creating the universe around the main character and overall that time spent pays off well as things progress. It does tend to lose itself when the heat of the erotica comes into play. Various characters are obviously devils and otherwise, some of them being quite stereotypical in their actions and desires. Being “bad” is one thing, acting “bad” to the extreme is a caricature and doesn’t always work.
The succubus of the work, Carphalea, who’s name I rather adore, is very much the dominant succubus here, taking what she wants and needs as things progress. But there’s a neat little aspect to her that makes her something far better than the rest of those around her. It’s a shame that so much of her and her kind are clouded away, their truths not being revealed.
That is, of course, part of the story, the main character isn’t supposed to realize what’s going on until it’s too late and they are ensnared by a tail, and otherwise. The erotic heat is well done, it isn’t porn level silliness and that filled in a part of Carphalea’s being and what the future might bring for her and the lead character.
The work could use one more editing pass, there are some small word choices that don’t fit and sometimes the dialog is stilted and seeking itself. A bit more emotion and connection in the story between the characters would have added a lot I think as well.
Nonetheless it’s a delightful story, with promise. I’d just like more of what was left out to be there and make it more than it is.
Three and a half out of five pitchforks.
It’s a shame the story didn’t turn in the direction I’d hoped it might. Now this is part one of a series it seems, so the story might still turn into something more. I’d hope so, even if the idea is sort of expected as a whole..
There’s the beginning of an interesting story universe, but the question is if the author can manage to keep from going overboard on the sex and focus more on the characters. There’s a lot here to build on, and that should be interesting.
External Links
- This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com - No Longer Available
- This work in Various Formats at Smashwords.com